Escaping Osiris

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Fear creeps in,
Mind goes blank,
Eyes grow wide,
Lips splinter,
Throat dries,
Heart pounds,
Nerves quiver,
Hands shake,
Body weakens,
Legs tremble,
Soul suffers...


I'm closer!
Lying with you,
Breathing your air,
Smelling your scent,
Touching your skin,
Holding your arms,
Escaping this
Mortal sanctum!!


Blogger Φ said...

Nice measure and grinding halt..well done. If you had made each line of those verses a terse one it wud have been more brilliant.. :) xcellent pic as well

9:11 PM  
Blogger Demi Goddezz said...

good going...soul suffers...brillianto

8:00 AM  
Blogger vidhu said...

@ Φ : Thanx broah!

@ Demi: Glad u liked it!

9:41 AM  
Blogger nomadic_waves said...

A beauty.....need i say more?

1:56 PM  
Blogger vidhu said...

@ Nomad: Hahaha...thanx!

4:38 PM  
Blogger vidhu said...

@ Vidhya: Thank you vidhya for pointing out the errors and for your valuable sugestions :P

10:48 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

i just love the way you put your words and bring out the emotions. superbly written

4:55 PM  
Blogger vidhu said...

@ Anonymous: Glad you liked it :))

9:36 AM  
Blogger TwistedNoggin said...

Very passionate. Nice :)

9:05 PM  

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